Thursday, 17 October 2019

The Worst Soccer Game

WALT describe in our writing. We were trying to use some long and short sentences, use adjectives and adverbs, use juicy verbs to start a sentence, use a simile or metaphor, keep to one main idea in each paragraph and edit for spelling and punctuation.
I enjoyed writing about the terrible match we played in soccer.
I found it challenging to find adverbs and put them in my writing because the ones I was thinking of didn't fit in.




The icy grass crunched beneath us as we ran. The frosty wind thrashed against the ball and pushed it back as we tried to kick it. Frozen rain bucketed down. The clouds roared like a lion with all its might. The game still continued, even though the weather struck us with its might and our arms and chest felt stiff like frostbite. Eventually everything became a blur. Our bodies stung. The wind threw us to our knees. Cold rain soaked our clothes. Finally, after all that, I slowly got up from the ground and used all of my adrenalin to score the finishing goal. As a celebration, all I wanted to do was have a hot bath and a delicious hot chocolate.

1 comment:

  1. Bonjour Alexander,
    Your piece of writing was very descriptive and I think you have achieved your success criteria.
    Next time maybe you could use shorter sentences.
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